tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post7187740982635495880..comments2023-10-20T12:29:11.465-04:00Comments on C. Patrick Schulze - Author of Born to be Brothers: How to Write Your Novel's HookC. Patrick Schulzehttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17082489938964241713noreply@blogger.comBlogger19125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-24839736700866066352010-07-13T06:46:11.176-04:002010-07-13T06:46:11.176-04:00Thanks for your comments, Julie and Melissa. And, ...Thanks for your comments, Julie and Melissa. And, yes, they do work for your query, too. <br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-24607484902671976122010-07-12T14:41:33.176-04:002010-07-12T14:41:33.176-04:00Great list! Thanks for passing along your researc...Great list! Thanks for passing along your research and ideas. I would imagine that these tips would work for a Query hook, as well.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05783301584478246413noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-54816274150388758372010-07-10T19:38:35.838-04:002010-07-10T19:38:35.838-04:00This is a great list with amazing examples. Thank...This is a great list with amazing examples. Thanks!Julie Musilhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02150454913885915017noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-61659220215226417562010-07-09T15:02:53.685-04:002010-07-09T15:02:53.685-04:00And I'll be sure to pass the word along, Heidi...And I'll be sure to pass the word along, Heidi.<br /><br />I wish you a best-seller!<br /><br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-36440189948107969022010-07-09T09:37:10.258-04:002010-07-09T09:37:10.258-04:00I will let you know. No worries about that. :) In ...I will let you know. No worries about that. :) In fact, I will let as many people as possible know! :D<br /><br />HeidiHeidi Norrodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10230302412797698208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-71400156329593665772010-07-08T17:54:04.612-04:002010-07-08T17:54:04.612-04:00Excellent, Cafe! I think you've got a winner. ...Excellent, Cafe! I think you've got a winner. Good luck with it.<br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-1417107167094050172010-07-08T17:53:14.923-04:002010-07-08T17:53:14.923-04:00Best of luck, Heidi with your agent search. Let me...Best of luck, Heidi with your agent search. Let me know how it turns out?<br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-5720801950031761462010-07-08T16:05:01.101-04:002010-07-08T16:05:01.101-04:00Thanks - internal conflict is introduced at the en...Thanks - internal conflict is introduced at the end of the paragraph, and then the story jumps right into action. I appreciate the comment.Café Lopezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00356527115662788903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-66550717080135367402010-07-08T15:43:56.410-04:002010-07-08T15:43:56.410-04:00Thank you! I am about to start the agent hunt soon...Thank you! I am about to start the agent hunt soon & I plan on using this post in crafting my query. Thanks again for a great post. :)<br />HeidiHeidi Norrodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10230302412797698208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-47731755356100852272010-07-08T08:49:53.691-04:002010-07-08T08:49:53.691-04:00Heidi,
Yes. I am. Well done.
PatrickHeidi,<br /><br />Yes. I am. Well done.<br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-86413519111484059302010-07-08T08:49:03.379-04:002010-07-08T08:49:03.379-04:00Café Lopez, You've set a mood, alright. Does a...Café Lopez, You've set a mood, alright. Does any conflict rise soon thereafter?<br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-29037659176793417522010-07-08T08:47:25.549-04:002010-07-08T08:47:25.549-04:00Hey, Author Guy. You're hook does the job real...Hey, Author Guy. You're hook does the job real well. It creates a question, offers conflict right out of the box and all the rest. Nice work.<br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-29845653575238375312010-07-07T17:21:59.569-04:002010-07-07T17:21:59.569-04:00my current novel-in-progress starts with;
It wasn&...my current novel-in-progress starts with;<br />It wasn't my fault! I had nothing to do with the death of my father, Rick Peppers. <br />Hooked yet? :) <br />Great post!Heidi Norrodhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10230302412797698208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-21563360045419848462010-07-07T17:13:24.892-04:002010-07-07T17:13:24.892-04:00Great list. I spent a lot of time thinking about m...Great list. I spent a lot of time thinking about my first line, ultimately opting to a create a paragraph that invokes the same emotions troubling my prot. Not quite as exciting as some of your options, but here's hoping subtlety can be as effective as action. Here it goes:<br /><br />Lucy stared intently at the fire. It wasn’t real of course, but that didn’t stop her. She was drawn to the movement of the flames, the regular, rhythmic, undulating grace of each lick of fire moving in harmony with the other. It was so easy to get caught up in it...Café Lopezhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00356527115662788903noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-27735732795558391452010-07-07T17:08:05.873-04:002010-07-07T17:08:05.873-04:00"Tarkas was running for his life. Again.&quo..."Tarkas was running for his life. Again."Author Guyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18316825723835547403noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-50707744248723814922010-07-04T00:05:54.763-04:002010-07-04T00:05:54.763-04:00Nicely said, Ryan. Introduces the character, sets ...Nicely said, Ryan. Introduces the character, sets up the conflict, introduces all sorts of questions and had a great simile. Nice work.C. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-7857293524041043302010-07-03T21:07:04.853-04:002010-07-03T21:07:04.853-04:00That's quite a list, Patrick. I usually go wit...That's quite a list, Patrick. I usually go with the action scenes, or set a mood scene. One of my opening sentences is: <br /><br />Leaning against the stern tree, Thomas Woodling watched the approaching enemy with the eyes of a hunter stalking its prey. <br /><br />I found that worked pretty well, because I could jump into some action quickly and start the book rolling.Ryan Quintnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-37543259382105687722010-07-02T15:25:23.675-04:002010-07-02T15:25:23.675-04:00I'll take a look at your contest, Marissa. Sho...I'll take a look at your contest, Marissa. Should be interesting.<br /><br />Thanks for stopping by and thanks for the link, too.<br /><br />PatrickC. Patrick Schulzenoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6765389283359119973.post-84763821572975517972010-07-02T10:00:47.861-04:002010-07-02T10:00:47.861-04:00This is such an expansive list! For our line-by-li...This is such an expansive list! For our line-by-line contest over on our site, it's interesting to see which of these approaches contestants are utilizing. You can also see why certain openings just didn't make Natalie Fischer's cuts. We're linking you up for next week- like it or not ;)<br /><br />MarissaMartina Boonehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03358736828122139189noreply@blogger.com